Thursday, May 31, 2012

Describe Ice Cream And Carpet In Three Different Ways

It was one of those boring mornings where Mum was reading the newspaper and it was way too cold to go outside.
“Mum can you describe ice cream and carpet in three different ways?” I asked,
“No,” she replied,
“Why not?” I groaned.
“Because! Now shut up.”


Suddenly I saw the most annoying thing in the world...
Mosquito, it was sitting right there on Mum's shoulder, I crept slightly towards the thing and stopped. I got ready to smack it right out of this room when...
MUM MOVED!!! and I smacked her right on her injection she got today.
“HELP” she cried  “What do you think you're doing?”
I scampered back to my seat and stayed there...


“Describe ice cream in three different ways, mum?” I asked.
“NO GET OUT OF THIS ROOM!!!”
I slowly walked out of the room but just at that moment I saw the mosquito, it was now perched on the window with big beady eyes. I could just imagine the big beaming smirk he would have on his face like he had won the war but it was not over yet.


I got ready to run. 4, 3, 2, 1, smash! I went flying out the window.
“Ahh my window!” Mum screamed and she didn't even care about me.
I caught a glimpse of the mosquito flying happily off.
“Mum, can you describe ice cream and carpet in three different ways?”

This is where I got this photo from.

17 comments:

  1. Great Natasha
    I like that you put
    MUM MOVED!!! and I smacked her right on her injection she got today.
    “HELP” she cried “What do you think you're doing?”
    Great writing

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  2. Wow Tash.
    Your writing is really good.
    What is your favourite part of your story?

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    1. Thanks Parris!
      My favourite part was when
      I slowly walked out of the room but just at that moment I saw the mosquito, it was now perched on the window with big beady eyes,. I like that part do you?

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    2. I think that part is awesome, Tash.

      It uses the adverb 'slowly', has a well placed comma, the strong verb 'perched', precise noun 'mosquito' and the strong adjective 'beady'. Wonderful description and sentence formation!

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  3. Great Natasha
    I like that you put
    MUM MOVED!!! and I smacked her right on her injection she got today.
    “HELP” she cried “What do you think you're doing?”
    Great writing

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  4. Cool Natasha

    You story is very very funny and you all most won the war.
    That mosquito must have been annoying.

    Courtney :)

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    1. Thanks Courtney!
      I just made up the story but I really do hate mosquitoes!

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  5. Awesome story Natasha
    Good punctuation to she never even described it to you
    will there be a second
    From Brody

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    1. Thanks Brody!
      You will have to wait and see.

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  6. Awesome writing Tash.
    My favourite part is: MUM MOVED!!! and I smacked her right on her injection she got today.
    This is a great writing Tash.
    What is your favourite part?

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    1. Thanks Floss!
      My favourite part was when
      I slowly walked out of the room but just at that moment I saw the mosquito, it was now perched on the window with big beady eyes.

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  7. This is awesome Tasha!
    I like how you described the mosquito was bugging you and how you wanted mum to describe ice cream in three different ways. How long did it take you to write?

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    1. Thanks Katherine!
      I liked the writing topic.
      It took me one night.
      Thanks

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  8. Great story Natasha!
    It sounds really painful!
    It was really funny how you made the character ask her mum over and over again can you describe ice cream and carpet in three different ways!

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