Saturday, November 10, 2012

The Bracelet (Chapter 1)



It all started with that stupid bracelet that I found. If I had not picked it up and tried it on I wouldn't be in all this trouble now. But I suppose you want to hear the full story, so it all started right back to the start of the year.


Chapter 1 

Me And My World

“Sophie! got all your stuff?” Moving, moving and moving it was always a pain and today was that day, packing bags, chucking them into the truck or what you call van. I was so tired of moving and changing school but I got used to after awhile because we did it all the time. My Dad is a secret agent he works for the S.A.S which of course stands for Secret, Agent, Spy, so that's the reason we keep on moving  because of Dad and that job of his it's his fault. But Dad says “You can’t always have everything Sophie”. I just ignore him and walk off. But on the other hand my Mum has a ordinary job she is a school teacher at North High School, that's where things get tricky between the two jobs. A S.A.S that always has to move every two months or so or a High School Teacher that can’t move at all.

So Mum had to quit her job and just had to, had to become another S.A.S. Now I am so angry at Mum for giving up her easy and not so complicated job and going for a more lets just say complex job. “Grr! Parents never understand life”

There's one more person in our family, that is my little brother Johnny. I can’t describe him in any other words then disturbing, annoying and a show off. I know he is only six but once you get to know him he is like a clown but with no humour so he carries on and on and on and on and never gives up.  

24 comments:

  1. I really like your introduction. It makes the reader want to read on and find out about the bracelet.I wonder if Johnny had anything to do with it. I am looking forward to chapter two, Tash.

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    1. Thanks Mr.M!
      I will be nearly be finished with the second chapter.

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    2. Thanks Mr.M!

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  2. Awesome Tash!
    That kind of reminds me of Paul Jennings's amazing writing!
    Well done and keep up the great work!

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  3. Great work Tash. Your writing is so cool. You have built up the story well. Cannot wait to read chapter two. Well done:)

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  4. Subarashi Natasha! (It's awesome in Japanese!)
    It sounds like something an author would write.
    I wonder what happens in chapter 2!

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    1. Thanks Kharn!
      Great thinking, I like how you said "awesome":)

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  5. Wow Natasha

    Awesome story I love it how you said that parents never understand life. I also like how your Dad was a S.A.S and your Mum is a teacher.
    Keep up the GREAT WORK!

    Courtney :)

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  6. Awesome Natasha!
    Your writing is awesome. This writing reminds me of The Incredibles.
    Where is the bracelet in this story?
    Can't wait for part 2!

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    1. Thanks Stefan!
      The bracelet come in later on so wait and see:)

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  7. Great start to an original story Natasha. I'm already imagining what the bracelet might look like. Send me more chapters when they are done please.

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  8. Awesome first chapter Tash!
    I love all of it.
    It is great.
    Can't wait to read more.
    Well done:)

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    2. Thanks Hannah!

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  9. Awesome Tash!
    I love your first chapter of the bracelet!
    I can't wait to read more.
    WELL DONE!

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  10. Cool Tash!
    Your first chapter of the bracelet is very interesting.
    I like how you have done a very original.
    I can't wait to read the next chapter.
    Keep it up.
    From Olivia

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  11. Hey, Natasha, what a great narrative hook in that first section about the bracelet. It well and truly captures the reader. Then the first chapter has such great insight into how ANNOYING parents can be. I really believe in your main character (that's the protagonist). Can't wait to read chapter 2, so I'll go to it right now. Best wishes

    Barbara Else

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    1. Wow, thank you so much Barbara!
      I can't believe this is actually happening. I really enjoy writing and want to become a author when I am older. Thanks:)

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