Thursday, May 3, 2012

Autumn


This is the tree where my leaf used to live.

Autumn
1/5/12

The breeze is singing
a cheerful tune. 
Howling and growling
like a crow squawking.

The leaves happily dance
along the ground. 
Having a ball 
making a crackling sound.

Trees sway like 
they're going to break down.
But they still stay up like 
they're hooked to the ground.

The sun can’t stay awake 
so it hides behind clouds. 
Never coming out 
it darkens the house.



By Natasha Horsfall

Voice Recorder >>
This is my leaf in a green bush. 

WALT: observe and include specific details in our writing
SUCCESS CRITERIA

SELF ASSESSMENT
Includes four nouns (from observation)
Made the nouns do something
Started each new description on a new line
Extended each line so it makes more sense
(may include a who, where, why, what, when).



12 comments:

  1. Great Tash this really cool, your speech is nice and clear and you have a great expression. What is your favourite part of the poem?

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    1. Thanks Floss
      My favourite part is the leafs.
      I like your poem too.

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  2. Amazing Tash.
    That is such a cool poem what was the best thing about writing your poem?

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  3. Amazing Tash i love you writing And i love you direct speech Was it hard Thinking of all that writing

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    1. Thanks Eden
      No and yes it was hard at the start but after a while things kept popping into my head.

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  4. The expression in your voice is stunning, Tash!

    Your poem has strong verbs and a fun rhythm and rhyme.

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  5. Cool Tasha!
    Your poem is awesome and your verbs are really strong.
    Do you love Autumn?

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    1. Thanks Katherine!
      I do love autumn but I love summer more.

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  6. What a great poem Tash,and it was great to here you read it with such enthusiasm and expression .Well done

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