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| This is the tree where my leaf used to live. |
Autumn
1/5/12
The breeze is singing
a cheerful tune.
Howling and growling
like a crow squawking.
The leaves happily dance
along the ground.
Having a ball
making a crackling sound.
Trees sway like
they're going to break down.
But they still stay up like
they're hooked to the ground.
The sun can’t stay awake
so it hides behind clouds.
Never coming out
it darkens the house.
The breeze is singing
a cheerful tune.
Howling and growling
like a crow squawking.
The leaves happily dance
along the ground.
Having a ball
making a crackling sound.
Trees sway like
they're going to break down.
But they still stay up like
they're hooked to the ground.
The sun can’t stay awake
so it hides behind clouds.
Never coming out
it darkens the house.
By Natasha Horsfall
Voice Recorder >>
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| This is my leaf in a green bush. |
WALT: observe and include specific details in our writing
SUCCESS CRITERIA
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SELF ASSESSMENT
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Includes four nouns (from observation)
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Made the nouns do something
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Started each new description on a new line
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Extended each line so it makes more sense
(may include a who, where, why, what, when).
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Great Tash this really cool, your speech is nice and clear and you have a great expression. What is your favourite part of the poem?
ReplyDeleteThanks Floss
DeleteMy favourite part is the leafs.
I like your poem too.
Amazing Tash.
ReplyDeleteThat is such a cool poem what was the best thing about writing your poem?
Thanks Amy
DeleteI liked rhyming.
Amazing Tash i love you writing And i love you direct speech Was it hard Thinking of all that writing
ReplyDeleteThanks Eden
DeleteNo and yes it was hard at the start but after a while things kept popping into my head.
The expression in your voice is stunning, Tash!
ReplyDeleteYour poem has strong verbs and a fun rhythm and rhyme.
Thanks Mr.M
DeleteCool Tasha!
ReplyDeleteYour poem is awesome and your verbs are really strong.
Do you love Autumn?
Thanks Katherine!
DeleteI do love autumn but I love summer more.
What a great poem Tash,and it was great to here you read it with such enthusiasm and expression .Well done
ReplyDeleteThanks Dad
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