“Splash!” I dive into the water.
“123” breath, “123” breath. I was trying to look around to see where I was coming but I couldn't. Suddenly, “bam!” I hit the edge of the pool.
“What did I come? What did I come?”
“I came... second!” I shouted trying to gasp my breath. “Wow!!!” I ran back to my seat trying to find my damp towel.
Exciting writing, Natasha! I like how you share the determination in your thoughts. Is finding your damp towel a good way to end? What happened next? Who did you talk to? How did you feel?
ReplyDeleteI think it is a good way to end because after that we just started to talk. I felt proud of my self because I did not do it last year because I was sick.I talked to Katrina, Lily and Olivia
DeleteTo Natasha
ReplyDeleteHi my name is Maia from room 14 at vardon school.What an interesting swimming sports you had. You should have taken more towel.
Where did you have your swimming sports at?
Hi my name is Emerson from room 14.what was your favorite part about the swimming sports?maybe if you practise more then you could come first!I don't know how you lived in a wet damp towel I know i couldn't I hate having a wet towel.I like how you enjoyed swimming sports you sound like a really entusastic girl.one day I hope i can be your friend :)
Hi Maia
DeleteI did take more towels but they were back in my school bag in my class.We had the swimming sports in our pool .It was very cold.
Hi Emerson
My favourite part was of course the relay where we raced are house colours groups.I go to swimming lessons so that gives me a lot of practice.I would love to be your friend.Do you have house colour groups in your school?
Hi Tash
ReplyDeleteI could really feel how excited you where about coming second.What a great piece .
Dad
Thanks Dad.
DeleteI was really excited it was incredible!
A great piece of writing Natasha! I could feel the effort you put into the race through your writing.
ReplyDeleteI wonder what your goal at swimming sports will be next year???
I bet it will be breaststroke.I have not got the hang of it yet.But I got into the inter schools anyway.
DeleteHi I am frank I go to Pt England School in Auckland. I love swimming sports. It was a great day. I love your writing it is so interesting . I like your your clacking description word.
ReplyDeleteHi Frank
DeleteMy name is Natasha.I live in Hastings.Thank you for writing a comment on my blog.I like swimming sports too.I also go to swimming lesson.I never been to Auckland but my mum is going this weekend.Do you go to swimming lesson?
Hi Natasha
ReplyDeleteI love this piece of writing, especially the start with no more mucking around It really shows your personality. You were great at freestyle as well:). I also came second in the freestyle! Question, did you hit your head on the wall or did you hit it with your hands?
and did you enjoy the swimming sports?
Thank you
DeleteI hit it with my hands.
I really did enjoy swimming sports because I like swimming.Did you get into the inter schools?
I love your swimming story and you're quite lucky to make it into the inter schools.
ReplyDeleteThanks you
DeleteI was so relived because I put a lot of effect into going to the swimming sports!
Great effort in to your swimming sports Tash.What was your favourite race you did.Well Done!
ReplyDeletePS thanks for butting the photo of me up
That's all right:]
DeleteI liked the backstroke.It was fun at the inter schools too.